Introduction letter

Dear Professor Blackstone,

My name is Yong Zheng Hao, I am writing this letter to introduce myself to you. I graduated with a diploma in Aeronautical Engineering from Singapore Polytechnic in 2019. I am currently a first-year robotics system engineering student in Singapore Institute of Technology.

My interest in robotics system mainly comes from my hobby, which is building model kits. I have been building model kits since I was a kid thus having an interest in robots for quite some time. The reason why I wanted to continue engineering after polytechnic was because of the various modules I enjoyed from the course. Modules such as engineering math's and physics. Putting together my hobby and the general engineering modules I enjoy, choosing robotics system engineering was an easy choice for me.

One weakness I have in communication is that I feel very uncomfortable and nervous when having to present to a group of people. For example, I will forget all the preparation I did when it was my turn to present.

For my strength, l feel that I can listen and empathize with others while providing necessary feedback and encouragement.

In conclusion I hope by the end of this module, I will be able to feel more comfortable and less nervous when having to present to a group of people so that I can share what I have prepared clearly to the audience.

Thank you for taking the time to read my letter

Yours sincerely,

Zheng Hao

Comments

  1. Unknown14 September 2021 at 09:33

    Hi Zheng Hao, I am glad to read about how you started building model kits since young. Great to see you are very straight up with your details in each paragraph. However, I would like to point out that you may be able to lessen down your sentences in each paragraph by linking it together. Take care!

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  2. Xinyi15 September 2021 at 09:12

    Hi Zheng Hao,

    I am happy to be able to find out more about you. Similar to you, I also enjoy doing mathematics and physics. Although I do find that your self-introduction in general is quite good, but I did notice that you did not spell out the word 'mathematics' in your letter. I think that it would be better to spell the word out, since this is a formal letter, so that it will seem more professional.

    Best wishes,
    Xin Yi

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  3. Joshua18 September 2021 at 21:16

    Hello Zheng Hao,

    Hello fellow aerospace diploma holder. I like how you you really talk about yourself so concisely and straight to the point. There are a number of interest that we have in common.

    As for criticism, you ended of with your letter twice.

    Regards.

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  4. Brad Blackstone22 September 2021 at 00:12


    Dear Zheng Hao,

    It’s a pleasure to read this clear, concise letter. Thank you for sharing.

    I’m happy to learn, for example, how you developed an interest in models. What sort did you typically build? Can you be more specific?

    You have also explained your strengths and weaknesses in communication and your goals. I can say for certain you will have a chance towork on presenting this term.

    A few language issues include the following:

    1. punctuation

    -- My name is Yong Zheng Hao, I am writing this letter to introduce myself to you. > comma splice?
    -- Thank you for taking the time to read my letter > ?

    2. fragment
    -- Modules such as engineering math's and physics.

    3. word form
    -- -- engineering math's > ?

    Let's work on these issues together.

    Best wishes,

    Brad

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